What You Need Upfront:
A typical query letter starts out with a hook, which is followed by the most important information an agent wants to know upfront: genre and word count.
The Pitch:
The next two paragraphs are the pitch: what happens. The hard part is fitting this into two paragraphs at the most while leaving something for the agent to wonder about– a little tease. (In mine, for example, I purposely didn’t reveal what the main character’s “horrifying truth” is. I didn’t give away Joe’s secret, either, but I felt mentioning that he has one was important. Otherwise, why would anyone care about him? There was also a time leap between paragraphs that indicates a lot happens in Angelica’s life– a divorce, two kids, an ex in jail– that would raise curiosity, but writing anything more was unnecessary.)
Wrap up:
The query ends with your bio and then, “If you’d like to know more about XXXX, please let me know. Thank you for your time.”
Get to the heart of your story
Ann Collette, an agent from Helen Rees Literary Agency, was at Stonecoast during my graduation residency at Stonecoast, helping students with their letters. She told me not to bother writing anything obvious such as, “I am seeking representation….” It makes her eyes glaze over.
I think the most important thing about fiction queries is to include colorful aspects of the story that will help to reveal character and show off your writing style.
At the same time, you should avoid vague language. (such as “Angelica’s life takes a dark turn” because what, exactly, is a dark turn?)
It never hurts to get someone else’s perspective on your story. Sometimes they can encapsulate it better than you can, but by the time you’re finished with a novel, you should know what it’s really all about! And that’s the main thing– getting the heart of your story in the query letter.
Linda K. Sienkiewicz is the author of In the Context of Love, about one women’s need to tell her story without shame. Publisher: BuddhaPuss Ink LLC
2016 Sarton Women’s Fiction Finalist
2016 Eric Hoffer Book Award Finalist
2016 Readers Favorite Book Finalist
2016 USA Book News “Best Book” Finalist
Angelica Schirrick had always suspected there was something deeply disturbing about her family, but the truth was more than she bargained for.
“With tenderness, but without blinking, Linda K. Sienkiewicz turns her eye on the predator-prey savannah of the young and still somehow hopeful.” ~ Jacquelyn Mitchard, author of the #1 NY Times Bestseller, Deep End of the Ocean
“At once a love story, a cautionary tale, and an inspirational journey.” ~ Bonnie Jo Campbell, author of National Book Award Finalist, American Salvage, and critically acclaimed Once Upon a River,and Mothers, Tell Your Daughters
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Shelley Stout says
This is so beautiful it takes my breath away.
Linda K Sienkiewicz says
Thank you, Shelley! I worked so hard on it!
cherilaser says
Thanks for this. Your words and thoughts are very helpful.
All the best to you.
Cheri
Linda K Sienkiewicz says
You’re welcome, Cheri. It isn’t easy to write a query!
easearle says
Hi Linda:
What a masterpiece: you really boiled down your wonderful rich novel to its essence here and I’m happy to have contributed a phrase. Congrats again on nabbing an agent and keep us all posted as your literary ascent continues!
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Elizabeth
Linda K Sienkiewicz says
Thanks for the congratulations, Elizabeth. You summed up the story better in that one sentence than I ever could have.
It’s amazing that one could spend hours writing the pitch, but it’s so important when so many agents want nothing except a query letter from fiction writers. So that’s all you have to get your foot in the door!
Charity Bradford says
Thanks for replying to my tweet/blog post about queries. This was very helpful and I tweaked a few things in my query thanks to it.